Your current sentence is fine, as the subject (the 'they' referred to) of the sentence is already clear. While would indicate that these two are occuring simultaneously but are not reliant on each other, and when indicates that it is only at that point (i.e..coaxing) that they make hasty attempts.
When usually means at or immediately after some ...
I believe my first impression could be justified (problem). After having thought about the several comments to the question, it finally occurred to me that "not only… but also" was a unit that could leave some trace somewhere and the check I made was conclusive.
(Grammarly: Parallelism with "not only…but also)
When using "not only . . ....
I don't think there really is an "exact rule" [binding rule] that
covers this situation and tells you whether a comma is required to be
(or not to be) put there. It basically comes down to how the author
wants the sentence to read.
If they want a slight pause there, they should put in a comma. If not,
then it should be left out. T.E.D. Sep ...
The quote appears to illustrate the two types of "reasons" one could give when making a statement:
The justification or evidence that the speaker has for making the statement.
A reason that the stated phenomenon has occurred.
Thus, in the first example, the speaker explains what evidence led her to conclude that the invitation was forgotten:
One understands naturally, so to speak, that "only" means "did nothing else but"; however, the naturalness is to be placed on the count of the logic of what the remainder of the sentence tells us, not the position of the adverb, this being so because in this position one possible interpretation, "he watched TV but watched nothing ...
In the sentence
He knows [that she'll be at the party].
the bracketed Complement Clause that she'll be at the party is the direct object of know
(what does he know? that she'll be at the party). Know is a verb that can take a that-complement as object.
This object complement clause is introduced by the Complementizer that; complementizers mark subordinate ...