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It is difficult to figure out how to alter the word although for a case like below as in my report there are many although.. so I am looking for an alternative like in spite of

Although the merging step increased the incorrect growth of the water over the grasslands, the merging didn't affect the classified tree clusters because the algorithm didn't lose any candidates.

I have altered it as;

In spite of the incorrect growth of the water over the grasslands by the merging step, the merging didn't affect the classified tree clusters because the algorithm didn't lose any candidates.

I am not very sure whether my 2nd sentence is correct. would it be ok?

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    This is a thesaurus question. Have you checked out "although" on thesaurus.com? There are many alternatives on that page. There are other grammatical problems with your sentence. "affect for the classified" should be "affect the classified" and "as the algorithm doesn't lost any" should be "because the algorithm {doesn't / didn't} lose any". Please edit your question, look at the thesaurus and select some alternative expressions, and then rephrase your question when you have a few specific questions about which alternative is best.
    – user21497
    Commented Nov 13, 2012 at 1:08
  • @ Bill Franke: thanks for the corrections... i have added alternative sentence and altered the post as well.
    – gnp
    Commented Nov 13, 2012 at 1:20
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    niro, your second sentence still has a number of significant fluency errors. Grasslands is one word; 'didn't lost' is ungrammatical; "by merging step" seems to be missing an article or determiner ("by (the)/(this) merging step"); and the referent of 'it' is unclear in "it didn't affect" (perhaps should be "(the step)/(this) didn't affect").
    – Mark Beadles
    Commented Nov 13, 2012 at 2:15
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    I agree with Mark that your new sentence has fluency errors. Another problem with it is that in addition to replacing "although", you've changed the syntax of the sentence. That complicates the question. I'll answer the question about replacing "although" with a synonymous expression.
    – user21497
    Commented Nov 13, 2012 at 2:29
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    @Mark Beadles: sorry, I have corrected as much
    – gnp
    Commented Nov 13, 2012 at 2:29

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You can replace "although" with a number of expressions that are synonymous without significantly changing the syntax of your sentence as you did in sentence 2. Here are some examples:

Even though the merging step increased the incorrect growth of the water over the grasslands, the merging didn't affect the classified tree clusters because the algorithm didn't lose any candidates.

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Despite the merging step's having increased the incorrect growth of the water over the grasslands, the merging didn't affect the classified tree clusters because the algorithm didn't lose any candidates.

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The merging step's having increased the incorrect growth of the water over the grasslands notwithstanding, the merging didn't affect the classified tree clusters because the algorithm didn't lose any candidates.

There are other problems with the sentence, though. It sounds awkward to me. Maybe the phrase "incorrect growth of the water" should be changed to "flow of water", and maybe "the merging" should be changed to "the merge". I can imagine some scenarios in which irrigation water or flood waters merged and inundated grasslands, but I don't really know what this sentence is talking about, so it's difficult for me to come up with any better alternatives. I don't much like the three I've suggested, but editing someone else's writing without fully understanding what they want to say is usually somewhere between difficult and impossible.

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