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Yesterday, I went to a restaurant, drinking some beer with a friend whom I had not seen for several years. I found that he had changed very much. He was lean, now he was very fat...(self-made)

I feel strongly unhappy about these sentences. Yes, I met him in the past. But his change is a fact when I telling the story. I am confused about the usage of the tenses.

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I would suggest these changes:

Yesterday I went to a restaurant, and drank some beer with a friend who I had not seen for several years. I found that he had changed very much. He was lean, and had become very fat...(self-made)

I hope this helps!

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    whom I had; he used to be lean – mplungjan Nov 14 '13 at 7:13
  • and now he is fat – Jim Nov 14 '13 at 7:15
  • but had now become very fat – WS2 Nov 14 '13 at 9:06
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I think only two changes are necessary: "he had been lean, and now was fat", contrasting the pluperfect with the past tense to indicate that he was lean before he was fat.

The gerundive (drinking) is not tense-specific, so is fine as it is. If you wished you could also write "I found him much changed" to iron out the repetition of the pluperfect, but this would merely be a matter of taste.

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