This piece of text was found today in the streets of Amsterdam. I was wondering if its grammar is correct.
Wandered walker sewn onto the shadowy night. Vindictively I swear to be casted you, into the leaves of descendants you came.
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1Do they still have those marijuana coffee shops?– Michael HarveyCommented May 16, 2021 at 19:51
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1So the text might not be stoned drivel?– Michael HarveyCommented May 16, 2021 at 20:15
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4Bad English could be good poetry. Key word, could.– Yosef BaskinCommented May 16, 2021 at 20:26
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1It's off-topic: it's proof-reading, Primarily-Opinion-Based, litcrit, etc.– Cascabel_StandWithUkraine_Commented May 16, 2021 at 20:54
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3@SNR ELU is not a random sentence explainer service. Even English Language Learners, which deals helping people with difficulties of grammaticality, probably doesn't deal with this kind of question.– MitchCommented May 16, 2021 at 21:25
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Wandered walker sewn onto the shadowy night.
No. An article (a) should be used, so:
A wandered walker, sewn onto the shadowy night.
Vindictively I swear to be casted you, into the leaves of descendants you came.
Also no.
- Vindictively is a fronted adverbial. (You would cast him into something vindictively, for example.)
- [T]o be casted, in conjunction with you, is incorrect; it should say to cast you.
- There should not be a comma after the first you.
- [T]he leaves of descendants you came should say *the leaves of your descendants.
So:
Vindictively, I swear to cast you into the leaves of your descendants.
