Here is a sentence, slightly modified to be generic, for an award. My supervisor insists that the sentence is incorrectly written, although I cannot spot the error.
...the person was located and after XXX, BOB was immediately deployed to the frigid river to render assistance. Bob expertly directed the recovery of the severely hypothermic survivor and provided critical medical care enroute to XXX Hospital, saving her life.
Sure, there are other ways to write it, but space is an issue and I feel this is the most effective way of writing the sentence.
I was given the advice that it might be a dangling participle, but I am not sure it is. Thoughts?