I'm writing a paper and I have two questions about the sentence below.
The mineral derangements, represented by A and B, in the patients at the chronic phase after transplantation were strongly associated with the former C in a positive and negative direction, respectively.
, where A, B, and C are clinical parameters.
My questions are:
I have two modifiers for the word "derangements;" one is "represented by ~" and the other is "in the patents ~." Is the order of these phrases correct? It sounds a little awkward to me.
A was positively associated with C, while B was negatively associated with C. Does it sound strange when I say "in a positive and negative direction, respectively?" Let me know if there is a better way to write.
Thanks in advance, Nao