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I have problem with sentences structures.

I have sentences:

  1. He possesses wide span of skills and specialized knowledge in design, implementation, management, and maintenance a fully redundant high available fault tolerant wired and wireless production network architecture.
  2. He possesses wide span of skills and specialized knowledge in design, implementation, management, and maintenance a fully redundant high available fault tolerant production wired and wireless network architecture.

I am not sure, which sentence is grammatically correct?

Thank you in advance for your help.

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  • "a wide span of skills" and "... , and maintenance of fully redundant fault-tolerant wired and wireless networks". I am not sure what "production" does for your sentence. Is there such a thing as a non-production network? Or does that simply mean real-world with users, not testing?
    – TimR
    Commented Apr 5, 2015 at 17:39
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    If something like this helps, feel free to use it: "Widely skilled in design, implementation, management and maintenance, he possesses specialized knowledge of the architecture of fully redundant, highly available, fault-tolerant production networks, of both the wired and wireless types." Too many matters of translation are there to detail in a comment, and of course one can word the sentence other ways to emphasize other points, but I will note one item: the hyphen. The English construct "adverb adjective noun" is usually styled "adverb-adjective noun" if the adverb does not end in -ly.
    – thb
    Commented Apr 5, 2015 at 17:40

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There are quite a few mistakes in each, but easily fixable. Using your words, it should be written "He possesses a wide array of skills and specialized knowledge in the design, implementation, management(,) and maintenance of fully redundant (high available? might want to check that) fault-tolerant wired and wireless (production) network architecture."

Edit: If you wish you use "spans," it is probably better to say "His skill set spans (subject list)" but there is always a chance it could even come off a little strange.

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