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The importance of this piece, however, is probably better demonstrated in how much it has assisted me to be a photographer.

Maybe it should be like this?

The importance of this piece, however is probably better demonstrated in how much it has assisted me to be a photographer.

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    Two commas ain't commas galore. The first version reads better. And it should be demonstrated by.
    – user405662
    Commented Apr 1, 2021 at 20:29
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    @user405662 is right on. However in the middle of a clause needs comma intonation (mid-lo-hi-mid) before and after. Plus, the complex passive is demonstrated in is limited to objects that are actual nouns like this picture, not embedded question complement clauses. If you want to use such a complement, the standard agent phrase preposition for the passive is demonstrated is by, not in.
    – John Lawler
    Commented Apr 1, 2021 at 20:47
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    And, by the way, galore is an odd adjective because it must follow the noun it modifies, and also because it must modify a mass noun or a count noun in the plural. Commas are countable, so *comma galore is ungrammatical.
    – John Lawler
    Commented Apr 1, 2021 at 20:59
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    @John Lawler Sister of the Bond Girl?
    – Edwin Ashworth
    Commented Apr 2, 2021 at 13:28

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When using however in this sense, as a synonym for "though" or "nevertheless," punctuate it as in your first version.

Since surrounding commas are commonly used for this sense of however, leaving one out leads the reader to believe that you are using however as a synonym for "in whatever way," and that makes the whole sentence confusing.

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