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I want to enumerate an incomplete but exemplary list of stakeholders and a basic property in a scientific/technical paper/proposal.

I'm unsure about what the most appropriate way to do so is.

Currently I do this:

Stakeholders in sensor bed data include: doctors, for patient data, facility management, for HVAC monitoring, equipment management, to improve bed logistics and the infrastructure provider, for instance Televic, to support preventive maintenance and obtain device statistics. 

Stakeholders in sensor bed data include: doctors, for patient data, facility management, for HVAC monitoring, equipment management, to improve bed logistics and the infrastructure provider, for instance Televic, to support preventive maintenance and obtain device statistics.

But it does not sound good and I'm unsure about the ":". Any suggestions?

I want to enumerate an incomplete but exemplary list of stakeholders and a basic property in a scientific/technical paper/proposal.

I'm unsure about what the most appropriate way to do so is.

Currently I do this:

Stakeholders in sensor bed data include: doctors, for patient data, facility management, for HVAC monitoring, equipment management, to improve bed logistics and the infrastructure provider, for instance Televic, to support preventive maintenance and obtain device statistics. 

But it does not sound good and I'm unsure about the ":". Any suggestions?

I want to enumerate an incomplete but exemplary list of stakeholders and a basic property in a scientific/technical paper/proposal.

I'm unsure about what the most appropriate way to do so is.

Currently I do this:

Stakeholders in sensor bed data include: doctors, for patient data, facility management, for HVAC monitoring, equipment management, to improve bed logistics and the infrastructure provider, for instance Televic, to support preventive maintenance and obtain device statistics.

But it does not sound good and I'm unsure about the ":". Any suggestions?

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Incomplete list of subjects in technical writing

I want to enumerate an incomplete but exemplary list of stakeholders and a basic property in a scientific/technical paper/proposal.

I'm unsure about what the most appropriate way to do so is.

Currently I do this:

Stakeholders in sensor bed data include: doctors, for patient data, facility management, for HVAC monitoring, equipment management, to improve bed logistics and the infrastructure provider, for instance Televic, to support preventive maintenance and obtain device statistics. 

But it does not sound good and I'm unsure about the ":". Any suggestions?