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After six months of looking for jobs, she got a reply from a job application she posted online from Macy's asking her to come to a interview.

The sentence does not sound right to me, what would be the correct way to say this?

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    Here's the problematic parsing for me while reading it: did she post the job application from a computer she was using in Macy's, or did the job application come from Macy's? – user730 Dec 13 '10 at 3:36
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    Yes: as it stands, it’s not incorrect, but it’s quite ambiguous. – PLL Dec 13 '10 at 3:47
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I am not quite sure as to the need for highlighting the fact that she has been looking for job for 6 months.

How about :-

Macy's responded to her online job application inviting her for an interview.

However, if you do need to highlight the 6 month search, then one option i can think of might be :-

Her 6 month job search has culminated in Macy's inviting her for an interview in response to her online application

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I suggest you drop 'from a job application' as it is pretty much implied.

After six months of looking for a job, she finally got a reply from Macy's asking her to come for an interview.

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You can start by using the correct article "an" when referring to "interview."

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You would be better to use "through" than "from" here:

After six months of looking for jobs, she got a reply through a job application she posted online from Macy's asking her to come to a interview.

Better still:

After six months of looking for jobs, she got a reply from Macy's (through an application she had posted online) asking her to come to a interview.

  • I'd be more inclined to use "as a result of" rather than "through". – Steve Melnikoff Dec 13 '10 at 13:29
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I'd try to simplify:

An online job application finally got her an interview at Macy's after six long months of looking.

This places the fact of the application being online front and center. If the time period is to be emphasized:

She looked for six long months before an online job application finally got her an interview at Macy's.

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After six months of looking for jobs, she got a reply from Macy's regarding a job application she had posted online, asking her to come to a interview.

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After six months of looking for jobs, she got a reply from Macy's to an online job application asking her to come in for an interview.

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