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Is it correct to combine multiple clauses (sub sentences) into one?

For example, let us consider this sentence:

On managerial side, I am experienced in accounting software, have been working throughout the life cycle of product, and have considerable experience for enhancing and improving existing products.

Here I am combining 3 clauses to make they one sentence, so I am wondering if it is grammatical?

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    There's nothing wrong with combining multiple clauses, but you have several other mistakes in your sentence (missing the_s, redundant "for" in "have experience _for", and it's not obvious whether the leading clause "on the managerial side" applies to all three sub-clauses). Apr 23, 2012 at 2:54
  • Thanks @aaamos. Can you please correct my sentence and write it in full ? Thanks once again.
    – user576510
    Apr 23, 2012 at 3:04
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    Your statement is a bit ambiguous. Does 'on the managerial side' mean that you have actual management experience (using accounting software)? In which case the other experience you quote doesn't seem to flow and ought to be separate sentences. OR do you intend that you have experience developing managerial software, i.e., accounting software, and if so you ought to say that explicitly.
    – Jim
    Apr 23, 2012 at 3:25
  • See JLG's answer for a corrected version of your sentence. Do consider @Jim's comment though, which I think is a good point. Apr 23, 2012 at 3:43
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    – user19148
    Apr 23, 2012 at 7:47

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Yes, you can use multiple clauses in a sentence. The clauses need to be parallel in structure. Your clauses are okay grammatically (I am..., have been..., have.) but the sentence is a little clumsy (which I think you sense). With a long sentence, you will want to delete unnecessary words and make the clauses strictly parallel.

I would suggest rewording your sentence to something like this:

On the managerial side, I have extensive experience with accounting software, a history of working with this product throughout its life cycle*, and a demonstrated talent for improving existing products.

(*I'm not sure of the meaning of this clause in your original sentence, so I am not sure if this is what you meant. It might also be better to name the product where I have this product.)

In this revision, I use the verb have once and each clause is now a noun clause...experience, history, talent.

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