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We are writing a commercial email that will be sent to our prospective clients. In the email, we have one section we currently name "Why do our services interest you?" describing why we think our services will attract those clients. We are still not convinced that this title is attractive and doesn't make sense.

Please suggest an alternative title instead of "Why do our services interest you?"?

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  • Writing advertising copy isn't really on-topic here.
    – KillingTime
    May 24 at 14:02
  • This isn't really the place to come for copywriting services.
    – Robusto
    May 24 at 14:06
  • Using a question is a bit weak compared to saying "Our services should interest you" or "Everybody is interested in our services" or even "All your competitors are interested in our services". But maybe in your culture people are more polite. Which you prefer is a matter of style, not of correct English.
    – Stuart F
    May 24 at 15:28
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    Maybe "How do/could you benefit from our services ?".
    – Graffito
    May 24 at 19:06

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