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I am writing a short description of my research activity. I am trying to say something like this:

For some years now, the challenge of modelling high-dimensional data has been an exciting task to me.

I think this sounds bad, however I can't seem to find a better way to formulate this sentence. I suspect there exists a simple phrase that I am missing.

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  • I'd prefer data has excited me and spell out the reason to make it believable, not just "an exciting task." But you don't say if you want bolder, sexy and persuasive, techie sounding, academic and formal. Just better, which is a bad fit here. Jun 19 at 20:41
  • Modelling high-dimensional data has been my primary interest for some time. You could also use principal. Jun 19 at 23:25
  • A down to earth point of view from the US: Some years ago I got excited about modelling high-dimensional data. This would work if that's an introductory sentence and you then say some more stuff about this. But I don't really like "some years ago." What about "during my post-doc" or whatever? Or I'm interested in modelling high-dimensional data? Think Hemingway. Jun 20 at 1:17

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The biggest weakness, in my opinion, is your use of "to be" instead of a stronger verb. We can fix that easily while also eliminating some unnecessary verbiage:

For some years now, the challenge of modelling high-dimensional data has excited me.

Another issue is that your sentence begins with the least important information. Let's fix that:

The challenge of modelling high-dimensional data has excited me for some years now.

Finally, "some" is pretty vague. You could change it to "several" or "many", which are still vague but probably a small improvement. It would be even better to be more specific, for example (borrowing from aparente's comment):

The challenge of modelling high-dimensional data has excited me ever since I completed my post-doc.

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