I've tried to paraphrase an IELTS Topic sentence, and I'd like to get some insight for my paraphrase.
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Topic: Although families have influence on a children’s development, factors outside the home play a bigger part in their lives nowadays.
Families play a pivotal role in children's upbringing. However, others think that it is their environment that molds their character nowadays.