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I am writing an action scene and trying to stress that a character is winding up a punch. For clarity this means frames 1-3 in the image below.

At the moment the sentence is : She winded the first punch.

But this doesn't look grammatically correct to me, and winded also means to be winded from a hit which makes this confusing to read. Two alternatives I'm considering:

(1) She wound the first punch, (2) She loaded the first punch.

With (1) since "wound" also refers to the injury I think it can be a bit confusing to read correctly. What would be a grammatically correct way to say the above?

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    The past tense alternative for "wind up" is "wound up"... "She wound up the first punch"..
    – Justin
    Commented Mar 3, 2021 at 3:06

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You mean making preparations to throw a punch?

That's usually called "drawing back"

"She drew back her fist. " or "She drew her fist back" either is acceptable.

“Striding up to him, Wilhelm drew his fist back and landed a clean blow to Rupert’s jaw. Rupert reeled, and after two wobbly backward steps, hit the floor on his backside. He raised a hand to his face. “Feel better?” “No. Get up so I can hit you again.” ― Melanie Dickerson, The Healer's Apprentice

They had breakfast in a hotel and were walking to the passport office when they were caught up in a riot. A huge man with a red beard drew back his fist to hit Phileas. Fix stepped in to protect Phileas and he was hit instead. A large bump soon appeared on this head.
― Jules Verne, Around the World in 80 Days

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  • Very good. "Round" and "loaded" sound ESL to me (no offense). Some synonyms: prepared to, cocked, reared back, etc.
    – Stu W
    Commented Mar 3, 2021 at 14:10

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