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It is terrifying when I see people demolishing cultural sites and monuments, "and" recording and posting them online.

Is it ok if I omit the second "and"? Will it still make sense?

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    The "them" in your sentence refers to "cultural sites and monuments", thus the sentence does not make much sense with or without the "and".
    – Greybeard
    Nov 13, 2020 at 21:44
  • If you want to avoid the repetition you could say 'then' instead of the second 'and' giving "...cultural sites and monuments the posting recordings of the destruction on line." This isn't a universal answer but would work here because the posting happens after the destruction.
    – BoldBen
    Nov 13, 2020 at 21:57

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As Greybeard says, in your sentence people are posting the cultural sites and monuments online. They're not. They are posting clips, films or movie clips. You need to rearrange it.

I think this would be the most precise way to say it:

It is terrifying to see, posted online, recordings people have made of themselves demolishing cultural sites and monuments.

Or possibly:

It is terrifying to see recordings people have made of themselves demolishing cultural sites and monuments being posted online.

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  • Thank you that was helpful.___How about this "It is terrifying when I see people demolish cultural sites, record their act of violence and post it online." Is it acceptable?
    – Teddy
    Nov 15, 2020 at 9:52
  • Not really. Is it terrifying for us when you see that? Really? "It is terrifying to see" was clear: "It is terrifying when I see" is not. What "act of violence" are they recording? Shouldn't it be acts? What is it in "and post it..."? Why aren't you content with one of the suggestions above? Nov 15, 2020 at 21:57

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