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I've been tasked with editing a new hire's bio, and I've been stumped by comma. For context, the intern is writing about how they found the company's job ad. They are currently still studying at university. Here's the original:

I was looking to gain some work experience , whilst I’m studying, and I happened upon a [company name] post advertising an internship position.

Here's my potential edit (without the comma):

I was looking to gain some work experience whilst I’m studying, and I happened upon a [company name] post advertising an internship position.

Am I overthinking this? Is there no need to remove the comma?

Edit: I forgot to specify that this is UK English.

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  • Whilst is formal for AmE, bit I agree that the comma doesn’t help. While is enough.
    – Xanne
    Sep 17, 2020 at 9:54
  • Whilst introduces a temporal clause not a restrictive/non-restrictive clause. I agree with Xanne that while is preferable and the comma better omitted.
    – Shoe
    Sep 17, 2020 at 10:15
  • Many thanks @Xanne and Shoe. I've taken your advice about the comma and replacing the word 'whilst'.
    – Aran Yarne
    Sep 17, 2020 at 13:38

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