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I have a technical paper related to computer programming that has the following small section:

Comma-separated expressions

Don't overuse them. Use them where they really make sense.

FirstName := "John", LastName := "Doe"
Age := 20

I don't like the idea to repeat the word "them", but repeating the section heading in the very beginning of its body is not a good one as well.

Comma-separated expressions

Don't overuse comma-separated expressions. Use them where they really make sense.

What's the way to make it less cumbersome?

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    It's a little clunky perhaps, but succinct. You may lose clarity with a more complex construction. – user888379 Jun 4 '20 at 22:18
  • @user888379 Perhaps it is better to combine the sentences? "Use them without overusing"? – jsv Jun 4 '20 at 22:27
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    You might want to consider something simpler for the two sentences following the heading: Use only when necessary. Comma-separated expressions is implied. Don't overuse is implied by Use only when necessary. Use only when they make sense is implied by Use only when necessary. Just a thought. – Richard Kayser Jun 4 '20 at 23:04
  • Or you could just use @RichardKayser's solid advice... – user888379 Jun 4 '20 at 23:19
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I would suggest:

Comma-separated expressions

Don't overuse them. Use commas only where they make sense.

On second thought, based on Jim's comment below, this might work better:

Comma-separated expressions

Don't overuse them. Separate expressions with commas only where it makes sense to do so.

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  • Using commas is different than using comma-separated expressions. – Jim Jun 5 '20 at 0:36
  • The title "Comma-separated expressions" provides the necessary context, @Jim – RobJarvis Jun 5 '20 at 13:58
  • Ok I like the addition +1 – Jim Jun 5 '20 at 18:42

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