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I would like to know your thoughts on how to correctly punctuate this text:

One of the most visited places here in Manila is Binondo, often referred to as the business capital at the time, before housing little towns and narrow sidewalks. Specifically near the shorelines of Pasig River therefore making it perfect for travelling by boat, trade and commerce possibly routed through and from Binondo.

(This is from a blog post, which you can read from this link: http://www.rochellerivera.com/2019/04/what-it-really-feels-like-to-live-in.html)

I have 4 things to point out:

First, the second sentence here is not a sentence at all. Where is the subject? Can we even connect it to the first sentence? Can we make it "sidewalks, specifically"?

Second, do we need to put a comma after "Specifically"?

Third, do we need to enclose "therefore" with commas?

Fourth, do we need to have a comma between "trade" & "commerce"?

Thank you!

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    The whole blog is written in poor English. The example you gives needs rewriting completely. Unfortunately, merely correcting the punctuation is not going to help at all, and proofreading is not done by EL&U.
    – Greybeard
    May 24 '20 at 10:20
  • @Greybeard I only need to correct the punctuations or the lack of them.
    – Celine
    May 24 '20 at 10:44
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    It cannot be punctuated because it is wrong.
    – Greybeard
    May 24 '20 at 10:45
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    I agree with @Greybeard. All sentences need to be rewritten. But here is a helpful post for the Oxford comma: english.stackexchange.com/questions/412/…
    – rajah9
    May 24 '20 at 10:47
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    I agree with @Greybeard. Punctuation alone won't help. May 24 '20 at 11:21

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