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I am now trying new things, including this blog, a thank you to all those who helped me get to where I am today by sharing their stories, and my way of paying it forward by sharing my stories.

How wrong is the above sentence? Can I fix it by putting a "which is" between "blog" and "a thank you", should I remove the last comma? Or is this just a dumpster sentence? Or is it actually grammatically correct/gray?

What I think I see is one independent clause followed by three dependent clauses, two of which are dependent on the first dependent clause. I see rules about one independent clause and one dependent, and two independents and multiple dependents, but still nothing about one independent with multiple dependents.

https://webapps.towson.edu/ows/sentences.htm

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I ended up editing it to be

I am now trying new things, including this blog. I hope that by sharing my stories and lessons learned along the way, this blog will help you in the same way that thousands of internet strangers unknowingly helped me with their stories and comments.

I think this is more correct but I'm still curious about the validity of the first example, if anyone has an idea.

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I am now trying new things, including this blog, a thank you to all those who helped me get to where I am today by sharing their stories, and my way of paying it forward by sharing my stories.

Without looking up the official grammatical rules, personally, I would feel much better about this:

I am now trying new things, including this blog—a thank you to all those who helped me get to where I am today by sharing their stories; it is my way of paying it forward by sharing my stories.

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