about relative pronoun

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I am wondering whether the omission of the relative pronouns is correct for the following sentence:

Older adults who are more socially isolated are more likely to experience depression.
Older adults more socially isolated are more likely to experience depression.

Are both of the sentences above correct? Thank you for your help.

The style in #2 is done, but it's not particularly good.
– Hot Licks
Jan 11, 2020 at 23:42 — Hot Licks, Jan 11, 2020 at 23:42

user312440 · Accepted Answer · 2020-01-11 23:43:27Z

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1 is correct. 2 is almost correct.

Past participles can directly modify nouns, but they need to precede the noun. So, you just need to move "older adults" to after "isolated":

"More socially isolated older adults are more likely to experience depression."

answered Jan 11, 2020 at 23:43

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+1 "Almost correct" is exactly right. And moving it there creates a better parallel structure, for lagniappe.
– John Lawler
Jan 12, 2020 at 0:35

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