In editing a book I'm trying to find the word to tell the author that there is such a thing as using too many descriptive phrases or too much description. Anyone? Keep thinking alliteration, but that's not right. Example, He refilled the stumpy thing. He was referring to his scotch glass. Stumpy is unnecessary, and excessive. Which he does often. So, what's the word I'm looking for?
There's a such thing as "verbosity."
the state or quality of being verbose; superfluity of words; wordiness
prose that is too elaborate or ornate.
If the words actually add no meaning, then the term is "deadwood."
(in writing) unnecessary words, phrases, or exposition; expendable verbiage.
Ironic, though, that you're criticizing this person for having too many words when you yourself don't have enough. But you're right about using too many adjectives. It makes for terrible writing. So tedious.
and now from the OED: a noun!
TMI n. colloquial (originally in the language of electronic communications) too much information; usually implying disgust or disapproval in response to a disclosure of an excessively personal or graphic nature.
1996 Lemonade & Pizza in alt.cosuard (Usenet newsgroup) 25 Mar.
All the underwear in question is briefs and not boxers. TMI?
Information overload (1967) was and still is used, but the OED added TMI as a noun in 2009.
I'd also suggest
Excessive going beyond a normal or acceptable limit in degree or amount
Overkill the state or an instance of going beyond what is usual, proper, or needed
but you could also use
Superfluous: 1a : exceeding what is sufficient or necessary : EXTRA b : not needed : UNNECESSARY 2 obsolete : marked by wastefulness : EXTRAVAGANT
Informally, purple prose.
Purple prose is characterized by the excessive use of adjectives, adverbs, and metaphors.
Euphuism is a peculiar mannered style of English prose. It consists of a preciously ornate and sophisticated style, employing a deliberate excess of literary devices such as antitheses, alliterations, repetitions and rhetorical questions.