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This is one out of the many holiday pictures I made my sister click.

Is this sentence correct?

Can this be said in any other way?

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    This sentence is unintelligible. Try to explain what you meant in a bigger sentence with more words. – Uhtred Ragnarsson Jul 8 at 7:56
  • As it stands, it's a sentence fragment and it's unclear what you're trying to say. The sentence would make sense if you added it is or this is to the start. Or is out focus to the end. There are many ways of modifying it that would make it complete. – Jason Bassford Jul 8 at 8:01
  • @JasonBassford I have edited it. Are there any other ways of modifying it? – user331014 Jul 8 at 8:07
  • @UhtredRagnarsson I am pointing out at a certain picture in a photo album whilst saying this sentence. – user331014 Jul 8 at 8:10
  • With that sentence, it could be shortened to just This a picture I made my sister click. But do you have a particular point of concern? – Jason Bassford Jul 8 at 8:12
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Your sentence:

This is one out of the many holiday pictures I made my sister click.

Is this sentence correct? - Grammatically, yes.

Can this be said in any other way? - Of course!

My main issue with it is that I don't believe "click" is an idiomatic expression for taking a photograph. "Snap", or "take" would make more sense.

You could say:

This is one of the many holiday pictures I made my sister take.

You should consider what you are trying to convey - what detail is most important. Are you trying to emphasise the volume of photos you took? You could say:

This is just one of the countless holiday pictures I made my sister take.

Are you trying to imply by "made my sister take" that you were very demanding whilst on holiday? If so, you could say:

This is just one of the many holiday pictures I made my long-suffering sister take.

There is no need to use more words than you need. If you don't mean to emphasise any of this then you could simply say:

This is one of my holiday photographs.

It is clear by saying "one of.." that you have more. Also, if you are in the photos then it is obvious someone else took it.

  • Thank you! This is very helpful. – user331014 Jul 8 at 8:54

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