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The logistics were those of a very large army, which indeed it was, battalions of extras and theatrical performers for the biggest sound set ever conceived.

Could someone simplify this sentence please?

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    Break it up; that's too much for one sentence. E.g, The logistics were the logistics of a very large army. And it was indeed a very large army; it had battalions of extras and theatrical performers, all destined for the biggest sound set that was ever conceived. – John Lawler Apr 16 at 19:19
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I would move the topic of the sentence up, and break it up into a separate sentence as well. You bury the lede after a convoluted introduction:

The sound set was the biggest ever conceived. Its logistics were like those of a very large army, which indeed it was, with battalions of extras and theatrical performers.

  • is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras – Hsn Apr 16 at 19:00
  • battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion – Carly Apr 16 at 19:23

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