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"He covered my mouth with a steamy kiss. His lips were partnering mine and the world went silent. I felt the promise of realness." -from my book-Me.Me?

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    No don’t use present continuous, keep it like you have it here. (Although I’m not sure what it means for lips to partner.) – Jim Feb 10 at 20:53
  • It's a style thing, but having the progressive and simple in the same sentence doesn't work for me. I would want a triggering event - the beginning of the kiss, not the continuation of it - to cause the world to go silent. "His lips touched mine and the world went silent" and "His lips were partnering mine and the world [was/had gone] silent" both sound better to my ear. – remarkl Feb 10 at 22:22
  • The use of "were" should be a clue that you're not using present continuous, after all. – Spencer Feb 10 at 22:25

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