I'm proofreading/editing a museum catalogue and I could use some help.
I found this sentence idiomatic;
"Around the beginning of the fourth century, extremely long chamber tombs emerged, a clear differentiation from the tombs of the surrounding regions."
The reason being that the part after the comma is made only with nouns. So I rewrote it;
"A tomb that was distinct from the other tombs in the surrounding regions was found, having an exceptionally long chamber. It is estimated to be from the beginning of the fourth century."
My question is: 1. Is my assumption that the original sentence is not grammatically correct right?
- Did I make it easier to read/understand rewriting it?
Thank you in advance.