I am 'querying' an agent... And I would like to keep grammar mistakes and infelicities down to a manageable dozen. So here goes:
In the following sentence,
"In the story, Gilgamesh is king, and Enkidu lowly beast."
is the second comma necessary? According to the internet, it seems so, and I tend to agree. On the other hand, I would also have been tempted to write,
"In the story, Gilgamesh is king, and Enkidu, lowly beast."
Is this incorrect? If not, is one form preferable over the other?
Thank you in advance.
(Note: the above sentence does not appear in the 'query' letter, but one with that structure does.)