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Consider the following sentence:

In 2013 Tallinn, Estonia, instituted fare-free rides for city residents (becoming the largest city in the world to do so), but car use in Tallinn has only slightly declined: as a 2014 study by the KTH Royal Institute of Technology in Sweden found that car traffic in Tallinn was down less than 3% since the policy was enacted.

My question is regarding the colon between the words "declined" and "as". Would it be appropriate to put a comma in place of the colon? Take, for example, the following sentence:

I received a cake and many gifts, as it has been my 21st birthday.

Why would it be inappropriate to put a comma instead of colon in the first sentence? If it is allowed, why would a colon be preferred over the comma?

  • I think you might get better answers if you edit out your last example. The grammar isn't correct, but if you correct it -- I received a cake and many gifts as it was my birthday -- it doens't fit your question any longer. – S Conroy Aug 6 '18 at 23:46
  • Basically, you've got to be anal-retentive to use a colon. – Hot Licks Aug 7 '18 at 1:39
  • Thanks for demeaning my attention to detail and my regard for syntax. You've made my day a little worse. – Hack Saw Aug 7 '18 at 22:05
  • The short answer is “… declined: as…” should prolly have used a full stop, rather than either a colon or a comma, though that would mean other changes. Don’t you think phrases like should be simplified so their meaning doesn’t get in the way of their structure? – Robbie Goodwin Aug 20 '18 at 0:01
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Were I editing the first sentence, it's the word 'as' which would go.

Changing the colon to a comma makes the sentence imply that the study was somehow the cause of the decline it found. It's a very muddy construction.

With the colon, but without the 'as', we get two independent statements linked by the colon indicating the second as amplification of the first.

  • Ah, I see. So just wondering, if 'as' was removed, a semicolon would work as well? – Jacob Foster Aug 7 '18 at 4:57
  • Yeah, it probably could. There is controversy around semicolons due to their in-between nature. In fact, the Oatmeal made a poster about this where he says you ought not use one before a conjunction, but the Chicago Manual of Style says it's acceptable. – Hack Saw Aug 7 '18 at 22:18

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