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Is repeating the subject twice in a sentence considered a grammar error or bad style? For example:

Epic Game Music will be held for the first time in Poland at Poznan Game Arena and Game Industry Conference 2018 and it is planned as a powerful and emotional opening event for...

or maybe the subject should be omitted and the sentence should go like this

Epic Game Music will be held for the first time in Poland at Poznan Game Arena and Game Industry Conference 2018 and is planned as a powerful and emotional opening event for

Which way is more correct and sounds better to your ear?

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    It's just a stylistic choice. But one factor you should take into account is that the more intervening text you have between the first use of the relevant noun and the subsequent "back-reference" to it, the harder it is for the reader to parse your text. For your specific example, explicitly including it as a "placeholder" for Epic Game Music isn't particularly necessary in that respect. Include it or don't, whatever feels "reasonable" to you.
    – FumbleFingers
    Commented Jul 22, 2018 at 13:11
  • Thank you for your very informative comment, FumbleFingers!
    – IGO
    Commented Jul 22, 2018 at 14:33
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    @FumbleFingers You should write more answers, Fumbelina. :)
    – tchrist ♦
    Commented Jul 22, 2018 at 16:33

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In a comment, FumbleFingers wrote:

It's just a stylistic choice. But one factor you should take into account is that the more intervening text you have between the first use of the relevant noun and the subsequent "back-reference" to it, the harder it is for the reader to parse your text. For your specific example, explicitly including it as a "placeholder" for Epic Game Music isn't particularly necessary in that respect. Include it or don't, whatever feels "reasonable" to you.

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