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Consider the following two sentences:

  1. Identified a subtle flaw in a sampling method, more specifically an effect of solids on the sample volume, thereby preventing false claims and saving other’s valuable time.
  2. Identified a subtle flaw, more specifically an effect of solids on the sample volume, in a sampling method thereby preventing false claims and saving other’s valuable time.

The first seems more "smooth" and "elegant". Due to my modest knowledge of English grammar, I cannot tell why. Is there a reason why?

  • Because, in sentence 2 you made a delayed appositive. – mahmud koya May 11 '18 at 15:20
  • @mahmudkoya Thank you for the super-quick comment. I am not sure if I understand your reason correctly, as the appositive seems to be placed closer to the beginning in sentence 2 than in sentence 1. That appears to be completely opposite to the meaning of delayed: be late or slow (Google Dictionary). – jaspreet May 11 '18 at 15:26
  • I mean the prepositional phrase in a sampling method, which is appositive of flaw, has been placed considerably away from the noun flaw in your 2nd sentence. Read more about Delayed Appositive here:webapps.towson.edu/ows/nouns.htm – mahmud koya May 11 '18 at 15:47
  • Other's could just possibly be others' but most likely should be others. – Edwin Ashworth May 11 '18 at 16:29
  • @EdwinAshworth Thank you for pointing that out. I meant to use others', as it was their time that was saved. – jaspreet May 11 '18 at 16:36

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