Would someone be kind enough to tell me whether the sentence below is OK, considering that 'fashioned' is a past tense verb, 'believe' is a present tense verb, and refuse' is also a present tense verb.

The people who initially fashioned and those who now believe that the theory and its predictions are well grounded refuse to accept . . . ."

Putting a comma after 'that' seems to separate the subject from its direct object, and rewriting the sentence in the following way made it too wordy:

The people who initially fashioned the theory and its predictions, and the people who now believe that both are well grounded, refuse to accept . . . ."

Thanks very much.

  • The parallelism in the original is indeed somewhat wobbly. Regarding your revision: one doesn't normally fashion predictions. – Lawrence Mar 10 '18 at 11:52
  • Thanx. If the "wobbly parallelism" can be overlooked, would changing 'fashioned' to 'formulated' render the sentence acceptable, considering that scientists occasionally formulate predictions, (e.g., here bit.ly/2I14stF ) – Skater Mar 11 '18 at 13:26
  • It’s the theory that’s fashioned; the predictions come along for the ride. So if you don’t mind the wobbly parallelism, the original is fine as is. – Lawrence Mar 11 '18 at 15:08

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