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100 Mn raised by 52 parents for their baby's treatment of extremely underdeveloped organs.

or

100 Mn raised by 52 parents for their babies' treatment of extremely underdeveloped organs.

Need to convey that each parent has a single child and they all raised a particular amount for their child's treatment.

Which is correct? Kindly help me out to understand.

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    What does Mn stand for? Million? Is this sentence for a leaflet, advertising purposes, account books? Who are you writing for? Are you just interested about the apostrophe usage? – Mari-Lou A Jan 31 '18 at 8:24
  • The first sentence seems to suggest there is one baby with 52 parents. Personally, I would rephrase the whole thing. That sentence is a bit awkward, so something like "…for the treatment of severely underdeveloped organs in babies." – Mari-Lou A Jan 31 '18 at 8:28
  • @Mari-LouA Just interested for apostrophe usage. Specifically for this sentence. Mn stands for Million, but I found the correct abbreviated form will be MM. – Shubham Jan 31 '18 at 8:29
  • The grammatical issue here (singular or plural baby?) is related to one handled in the question: “They're using a cell phone” vs. “They're using cell phones” at english.stackexchange.com/questions/301625/… – Shoe Jan 31 '18 at 10:55
  • Hello, Shubham. You say you're 'Just interested for [sic] apostrophe usage'. But as Dan Bron has said, '[ELU requires] a demonstration of effort on behalf of the OP. Effort on par with the effort OP would like potential answerers to demonstrate. Similarly for quality.' Neither sentence you suggest is of the required quality. The question is thus off-topic as it has multiple issues. Mari-LouA was trying to address this; it's not sensible to sideline her advice. / The ... – Edwin Ashworth Jan 31 '18 at 11:05
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Firstly, I suggest writing either $100M or $100 million.

Your sentence sounds better to me with '52 parents' as its subject. That requires the currently passive voice of the verb 'to raise' to be changed to the active voice.

Ask who/what/... does the action of the verb 'to raise'. Answer, the parents. Not always, but you should usually make your answer to that question the subject of your sentences. That gives you

52 parents have raised $100M for their ...

Baby's is wrong. That means one baby with 52 parents.

Possessive forms of plural words ending with 's' require the apostrophe is placed after the 's'.

52 parents have raised $100M for their babies' treatment of extremely underdeveloped organs.

It then sounds better to me if treatment of is moved earlier.

52 parents have raised $100M for the treatment of their babies' extremely underdeveloped organs

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  • Perhaps an "each" somewhere? – mplungjan Jan 31 '18 at 10:40
  • @mplungjan I was still making revisions to my answer at the time you posted your comment. I think my final version of my final answer does not require "each" to clarify the meaning. – Ross Murray Jan 31 '18 at 10:48
  • Perhaps you're unfamiliar with the 'distributive singular' usage (though I'd say it would probably be the less idiomatic choice here). – Edwin Ashworth Jan 31 '18 at 11:23
  • @Edwin I am unfamiliar with that terminology. Can you provide a link to something which explains it? – Ross Murray Jan 31 '18 at 13:18
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    @RMac Thank you for that clarification. I will interpret no reply to this as your concurrence. In the future, if I see something from one of more knowledgeable contributors here I might ask them a very specific "What does that mean?" question. If I'm still confused after their first answer I should attempt some research myself. If I'm still confused I will ask if I may take my questions to chat. – Ross Murray Jan 31 '18 at 15:36

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