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Is this sentence right in biography? And if we add a department how to construct it, I would say:

Currently, he is MSc student at the Department of Control Engineering of the Electric and Electronics Institute of Harvard University.

More detail:

He is studying MSc at Harvard University, Institute of Electric and Electronics, Department of Control Engineering.

I have problems with possessive construction in English

closed as off-topic by Dan Bron, Rob_Ster, Phil Sweet, Nigel J, Drew Jan 22 '18 at 17:08

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  • Why do you need to mention three layers of administration in the biography? Isn't mentioning the department and the university enough? (Or the institute and the university, if the Institute is more important?) If there were four layers, would you say "He is a student in the Applied Mathematics Division of the Mathematics Department of the School of Science at the University of the Boondocks"? – Peter Shor Jan 21 '18 at 14:12
  • Welcome to EL&U. If we do not know what you think might be wrong with it, we cannot answer; there are several different things one might question— the missing article, the use of the MSc abbreviation with a US university, the level of detail as Peter Shor notes. Please take the site tour and review the help center for guidance. Our sister site for English Language Learners may be of interest. – choster Jan 21 '18 at 17:11
  • @choster: it may not actually be an American University: Harvard doesn't actually have a department of Control Engineering, so this was presumably a way to anonymize some other institution. – Peter Shor Jan 21 '18 at 21:21
  • Thanks from both of you. Yes, Peter is right, because the name of the university is too long, therefore, I added presumably a short university name. Anyway, I know my English is bad and that is why I asked, and if I asked in a wrong place I apologize. The amount of information is extreme because my teacher told me to write the name of istitue+department to be more clear. – Qu.Kh Jan 22 '18 at 17:45
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@PeterShor is right the amount of information seems extreme. You also need 'an'. Try:

Currently, he is an MSc student at the Electric and Electronics Institute of Harvard University.

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