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You have taken the responsibility of student attendance and its accounting system, producing reports that all stakeholders can sense the importance of.

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    ...producing reports whose importance all stakeholders can sense. – KarlG Jan 11 '18 at 16:08
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    Your question is not clear to me. 1. In U.K. education language one would undertake the responsibility FOR something. 2. I do not understand what an accounting system has to do with attendance: is payment made only when students attend?; or are they fined for not attending? 3. What is the thing of which ‘stakeholders’ must see the importance? Is it attendance? Or is it the reports? – Tuffy Jan 11 '18 at 16:24
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    Ending sentences with prepositions is not something to be afraid of. – Nigel J Jan 11 '18 at 16:43
  • The of at the end of the sentence seems completely natural. Moving it around will only serve to make people think you believe in some non-existing weird rule that no sensible person wants to adhere to. – oerkelens Jan 12 '18 at 9:33
  • Ending a sentence with 'of' is not something to be afraid of. – Nigel J Jan 13 '18 at 2:48
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I believe the right way to change the least amount of the sentence is:

"You have taken the responsibility of student attendance and its accounting system, producing reports of which all stakeholders can sense the importance."

Or:

"You have taken the responsibility of student attendance and its accounting system, producing reports the importance of which all stakeholders can sense."

@Tuffy Just because it's an "accounting" system doesn't mean that money is exchanging hands. If it's a school they have to "account" for who's there and who's not on a given day.

RE: stakeholders, maybe it's a private school, and attendance is one way that they can show investors that it (the school) is worth their money.

Sorry, can't comment yet; otherwise, I would have.

  • I prefer the original version as being slightly clearer (and equally grammatical). – Edwin Ashworth Jan 11 '18 at 23:48
  • What's wrong with the hanging 'of'? It's perfectly correct. As are the two alternatives given in this answer. But as Edwin says, your original sentence is clearer. – Jelila Jan 12 '18 at 1:57
  • I'm not saying I like my version, I'm just saying those are the different versions that require the least amount of change. – John Doe Jan 12 '18 at 1:59

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