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I am looking for a word that encapsulates the idea of editing a sentence to make it sound more cohesive, compact and concise.

e.g. "We need to meet on the 11th to discuss our project and afterwards discuss dinner plans together. Then if there is time can we also talk about Jim?"

to

"We need to meet on the 11th to discuss our project, dinner plans and Jim."

Sorry about a poor example. Is this just called 'Editing'?

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  • I've close-voted here because the question requires a condensing element whereas the accepted answer does not. It is unclear what OP really wants. / If 'recast' is acceptable, the question is not appropriate on ELU, as synonyms for 'rephrase' should have been researched. – Edwin Ashworth Jan 11 '18 at 14:05
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As an editor, I use the word "recast" to convey this specific meaning, but that usage may be specific to the publishing industry or Australia. From the Macquarie Dictionary:

recast

  1. to cast again or anew.

  2. to provide a new or altered cast for (a play, etc.).

  3. to form, fashion, or arrange again.

  4. to remodel or reconstruct (a literary work, a document, a sentence, etc.).

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    Google Dictionary includes 'recast' in the synonyms of 'rephrase' : rewrite, rephrase, recast, put differently, put another way, put in other words, express differently, redraft, rework, revise, rescript, edit; paraphrase – Nigel J Jan 10 '18 at 23:45
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    There may be a logical inference that the aim might well be to make a sentence 'sound more cohesive, compact and concise', but 'recast' does not denote this. In fact, a sentence might have to be lengthened for the sake of clarity. – Edwin Ashworth Jan 10 '18 at 23:54
  • @EdwinAshworth, yes, that's true, but in making comments to authors about proposed changes to their writing "recast" works for me as a catch-all word. I might say "Recast for clarity: ... " And it may well be that I lengthen or conversely turn one sentence into two (or more) to achieve cohesion, compactness and concision. – Livrecache Jan 11 '18 at 1:19
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Writers I've worked with tend to use rework, as in "let's rework that sentence, it's much too verbose."

rework, v.: to change something such as a computer program or a piece of writing in order to improve it

  • Again, the 'condensing' element is not denoted here. – Edwin Ashworth Jan 11 '18 at 13:59
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For what it's worth, I think I've always been using 'rephrase' in this case:

Express (an idea or question) in an alternative way, especially for the purpose of clarification.

‘rephrase the statement so that it is clear’

From Oxford Dictionaries.

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tighten up (okay, it's a phrasal verb rather than a single word)

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