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My essay was revised by a native speaker. He made a revision as follows. Could anyone tell me the reason behind the revision? Thanks a lot.

Origial: Although as a little child at that time, I knew the location and names of all the countries all over the world.

Revised: Although being a little child at that time, I knew the location and names of all the countries all over the world.

  • 'as' is too familiar – JonMark Perry Dec 19 '17 at 6:49
  • It depends on the bit you’ve replaced with “...”. – Lawrence Dec 19 '17 at 8:31
  • I would advise leaving out both words. "Although a little child at that time..." , which implies "(I was) a little child". It's correct to say "As a child, I did this", but "as" doesn't fit with "although". – Kate Bunting Dec 19 '17 at 9:39
  • @KateBunting Depending on context, "Although a little child at that time..." could be ambiguous (i.e not making it clear it's me). – Mr Lister Dec 19 '17 at 12:22
  • To me, "although" implies that somewhere in that sentence there will be a contradictory statement that will offset the fact you were a little child, such as "Although just a little child at the time, I was responsible for feeding my 7 younger siblings every morning before school." "Being" does not have the same expectation. – Kristina Lopez Dec 19 '17 at 17:04
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"although" doesn't play well with "as" nor "being" in both of your examples. "although" signals a dependent clause, which, in your case, is exactly what "as" does as well. So they conflict.

Better edits of your sentence could be:

  1. Although I was a little child, I knew the location and names of all the countries all over the world.

  2. Though I was a little child, I knew the location and names of all the countries all over the world.

  3. Even though I was a little child, I knew the location and names of all the countries all over the world.

  4. Even as a little child, I knew the location and names of all the countries all over the world.

  5. Despite being a little child, I knew the location and names of all the countries all over the world.

Now, you might get away with the sentence below:

"Though a little child, I knew the location and names of all the countries all over the world."

But I think it's awkward.

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