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I need to mix

To err is human, to persist [...] is diabolical

with a joke about too much remarking.

The result should be

To err is human, to persist in remarking is diabolical.

Should I change it in "persist in remarks"? Would it give a more...as-the-saying-goes allure?

  • Know when you're beaten. – Edwin Ashworth Jun 29 '17 at 16:03
  • I'm not catching the sense of the joke, in that I'm not making a connection between "err" and "remark". Could you clarify? – DukeZhou Jun 29 '17 at 16:57
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    So something along the lines of "To err is human, to persist in quoting proverbs is diabolical"? – Steve Lovell Jun 29 '17 at 18:26
  • That one's nice! but I'm working on a translation here, so I can't change that much the meaning :< || @DukeZhou Character A says something wrong for the billionth (hyperbole) tyme, char. B corrects him as he always does; A semiquotes the saying implying that B his "diabolical" – Kyōka Jun 29 '17 at 20:21
  • @Kyōka ic. It definitely works better with the context. Is this a dramatic or narrative? (It reminds me of the type of pithy remark one might find in a Noel Coward play for some reason;) – DukeZhou Jun 29 '17 at 20:31
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If it's strictly between "remarks" and "remarking", I'd definitely choose the latter.

I can't give you a technical reason, since my preference is based on the aesthetics. (Possibly this is because the present tense lends it a more active feel, which is to say, it makes the line "more present" and increases the impact.)

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