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I'm trying to figure out the proper grammar for conveying that something is turning something into something else, without using pronouns. Consider this:

Socrates poisons the tranquil so that they become rabid.

I don't want to use the word they, or any other pronoun for that matter, because I think it sounds a bit pedestrian (this is part of a quasi ye olde english poem).

Would the phrase below be a valid alternative?

Socrates poisons the tranquil as to become rabid.

It sounds okay to me, but I'm pretty sure it's not proper grammar. Any suggestions?

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  • With poison, Socrates makes the tranquil rabid.
    – Davo
    Commented Apr 18, 2017 at 12:57
  • Was referring to Socrates corrupting the youth in ancient Athens by means of making them think and reason, i.e. not using actual poison :) Commented Apr 18, 2017 at 13:03
  • Oh, sorry. More like: Socrates poisons the tranquil so as to become rabid.
    – Davo
    Commented Apr 18, 2017 at 13:08
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    Ah! So as to become. I like it. Also, Microsoft Word complains, telling me to use concise language, so I guess we're on the right track since this is a poem :) Commented Apr 18, 2017 at 13:17

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Socrates poisons the tranquil so as to become rabid.

The OED uses this phrase in many of its definitions, even if it does not list it directly.

Developable:

(of land or property) able to be adapted or improved so as to become productive or profitable.

Merge:

Blend or cause to blend gradually into something else so as to become indistinguishable from it.

Relax:

Rest or engage in an enjoyable activity so as to become less tired or anxious.

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