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I came across my course-mate's writing, and find a sentence rather disturbing. Thus, I am writing to seek advice regarding the correctness of that sentence as follows:

If possible, ignore acronyms and other jargon, which renders the title complicated to readers who may not familiarize with the topic.

My main question here is whether it is wrong to have two relative pronouns (in this case, which and who) used in the same sentence as shown above.

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  • "That" does not appear in your sentence.
    – DyingIsFun
    Oct 26, 2016 at 2:11
  • But "that" and "who" and "which" can appear many times in a sentence. For example: I want the information which John got from the man who thought that all dogs bark. These are not conjunctions.
    – DyingIsFun
    Oct 26, 2016 at 2:14
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    Hi @Silenus, sorry for the typo. I mean 'which' and 'who'. I have changed the 'that' into 'which' in my question section by editing. However, my given sentence remains unchanged.
    – kjyon2
    Oct 26, 2016 at 2:21
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    The short answer is that neither which nor who are conjunctions, and there is neither any grammatical rule against having two conjunctions in a sentence nor against having two relative pronouns in a sentence. We will be better able to give you a complete answer if you can indicate what rule or guideline made you think otherwise.
    – choster
    Oct 26, 2016 at 2:34

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There is nothing wrong with your sentence except that renders should be render (the subject is "acronyms and other jargon*), and may not familiarize should be may not be familiar (incorrect use of familiarize):

If possible, ignore acronyms and other jargon, which render the title complicated to readers who may not be familiar with the topic.

The use of which and who is entirely grammatical.

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There is no reason to avoid the use of both. The sentence is confusing because "which renders" is singular and therefore refers only to the jargon and not to the acronyms. I suspect the writer intended "which render", thereby referring to acronyms and jargon together.

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