I am trying to write a long list of awards in a sentence, and have an issue with one of the items in the list. The sentence goes:

"ABC is the recipient of Golman Fellowship (2012), Andrew Bell Best Thesis Award (2013), Quaker Forum Challenge (2015), and Gryffindor Prize (2016)."

The sentence goes well with the first two and the last awards, but I am not sure of the third ("recipient of challenge" sounds weird). I could have written "ABC is the winner of Quaker Forum Challenge". But it would require a separate sentence that I am trying to avoid.

I can't replace "recipient of" with "winner of" either, as not all the items in the list were obtained in a contest. So, what could be a good way to include "Quaker Forum Challenge" in a single sentence with other awards?

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    "ABC is the recipient of Golman Fellowship, Andrew Bell Best Thesis Award, Gryffindor Prize, and the winner of the Quaker Forum Challenge." – Peter Shor Sep 4 '16 at 13:09
  • @PeterShor: Thanks. I should have added that the Quaker Forum Challenge is in the middle of the sentence, and that the list should follow a certain chronological order. I have edited the question now. – r2d2 Sep 4 '16 at 13:16
  • "first place in the Quaker Forum Challenge ..."? – Peter Shor Sep 4 '16 at 13:19
  • @PeterShor: Thanks, you are making really good suggestions. Not to make this more difficult, but there was not a first place in the challenge. There were 10 winners. Is there a noun I could use after Quaker Forum Challenge that has the same meaning as "win" but is more formal? – r2d2 Sep 4 '16 at 13:22
  • @HotLicks Thanks. But I can't write "recipient of Quaker Forum Challenge winner". – r2d2 Sep 4 '16 at 13:24

I propose a more direct structure, and ellipsis (in the notion of being the recipient or having been awarded) on the final prize:

"ABC received the Golman Fellowship (2012), the Andrew Bell Best Thesis Award (2013), won the Quaker Forum Challenge (2015), and (got) the Gryffindor Prize (2016)."

Because one can "win" a prize, too. I have added some "the", sounding more natural to me, but I am not a native. Or closer to your sentence, grouping qualificatives:

"ABC was a recipient or winner of: Golman Fellowship (2012), Andrew Bell Best Thesis Award (2013), Quaker Forum Challenge (2015), Gryffindor Prize (2016)."

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    +1 for the term recipient or winner of, though something tells me it should be preceded by a instead of the. – alwayslearning Sep 4 '16 at 17:24
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    @LaurentDuval: Thanks! This is perfect. I have used "ABC was a recipient/winner of ..." – r2d2 Sep 5 '16 at 6:44

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