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"She told us a story, it was a very nicely packed story but..." Is there a better way to say "nicely packed story"?

There was this person who gave us a speech and she shared a personal story. It was a nice story, "nicely packed" as a called it but when you look closely, the story pointed to the wrong thing and it was bad, but she made it sound very good. So what I want to do is to create a sentence which says she told us a very nicely packed story, beautiful on the outside, sounds great, but really rotten on the inside when you think about it.

  • I like nicely packed, actually. Can you try to elaborate on exactly how you'd like to improve it? Asked differently: what's wrong with it? Are you a non-native speaker who would like us to simply elaborate on its likely meaning (if so, the more context you can edit into your question, the better)? Or perhaps you're concerned it's not formal enough for some use you want to put it to (in that case, describe for us how and where you would like to use it)? – Dan Bron Mar 25 '16 at 13:33
  • Hi Dan, thanks for helping me out. I'm not a native speaker so I'm asking just to check if that phrase would work or is there a better one which I don't know about. – M5corn Mar 25 '16 at 13:37
  • Sure, no problem, let's find out. Can you edit your question to elaborate on what you mean by "nicely packed story"? Spell out for us all the ideas and nuances you wish to convey with those words. Give us examples of how the story was nicely packed, and what it means to be nicely packed, and maybe even what it means to be poorly packed. The more details you give us, the more specific and helpful we can be in our suggestions. – Dan Bron Mar 25 '16 at 13:40
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    I was trying to inspire you to edit your question so that you'd get more and better answers, rather than a short conversation with just me in the comments. But if you're preparing to leave, may I suggest as slickly packaged story? – Dan Bron Mar 25 '16 at 14:06
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    I agree that "packaged" may carry connotations closer to what you seem to be trying to convey than does "packed", at least to my American ear. – PellMel Mar 25 '16 at 14:42
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Try well presented.

Present verb 4.1 Exhibit (a particular state or appearance) to others - ODO

Here are a couple of examples from the web:

Your sentence would then be "She told us a story, it was a very well presented story but..."

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The ordinary way to put this would be: well told.

  • That doesn't indicate that the "moral" of the story was bad though. – Kevin Workman Mar 25 '16 at 19:04

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