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I said that the error was B (second parentheses) in this sentence:

Because male lions' manes are (affected by) temperature, (becoming) shorter and lighter in warmer weather, they are (of interest to) scientists (researching) climate change.

I thought that B should have been changed to, "which become." However, is this wrong because such a change would make the dependent clause refer to temperature, and not to the manes?

Edit: Since "becoming" is right next to "temperature," wouldn't the phrase, "becoming shorter and lighter in warmer weather," describe temperature? Hence, wouldn't B be wrong either way?

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    I can't see any grammatical errors (once you remove all the brackets themselves). Can you give a link to a context claiming there's something wrong? It's clumsy phrasing, with inherent ambiguity over whether "they" are the male lions or their manes, but such ambiguity is normal in English, and it wouldn't make much difference which interpretation you chose anyway. – FumbleFingers Jan 21 '16 at 20:26
  • Yes, where are you getting the answers for these questions? – herisson Feb 20 '16 at 23:19
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Pardon me for not knowing any technical terms. Your sentence -

Because male lions' manes are affected by temperature, becoming shorter and lighter in warmer weather, they are of interest to scientists researching climate change.

  • contains an ... uh ... inserted clause, or whatever the hell it's called: becoming shorter and lighter in warmer weather.

If you put it in parenthesis, you could also reword it thus:

(they become shorter and lighter in warmer weather)

And the resulting sentence would look like this:

Because male lions' manes are affected by temperature (they become shorter and lighter in warmer weather), they are of interest to scientists researching climate change.

From which you could conclude that in your original sentence the word "becoming" stands in for "they become," no more and no less.

Et voila. I hope this helps.  

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