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I was writing about a project I'll be starting during December.

What I want to communicate is the following.

1) During that month I will be conducting "preliminary experiments" (i e., testing the set up, preparing preliminary data register and analysis, etc) and if everything goes as I expect.

2) I'll be doing "more serious" research (i e., designing and conducting "the real experiments")

I need it to be relatively short so I can't explain in detail everything. I have written a very simple phrase but it doesn't sound right, there's something in the second part that sounds strange. Also, it seems that during December I will be fooling around instead of doing "serious" research while both parts are crucial.

I will be starting experiments during December, hopefully more seriously during the beginning of 2016.

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I will run experiments starting from December 2015. Preliminary work in the first few weeks will lead to/prepare the way for the first data collections in early 2016.

By the way, it is recommendable to be as specific as possible, so the generic experiment or data collection or similar terms might be replaced by something closer to the actual tasks, e.g. crystal growth, thin-film deposition, etc.

  • Thank you, your version is more clear and I believe I should be more specific. I would like to enlarge the phrase but word count is already above limit, I'll have to shrink my phases. – Matias Andina Nov 12 '15 at 17:50
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    In general, you can save a lot of words by avoiding general terms (which need to be specified later) and passives. It's also okay to avoid using presence of or occurrence of and keeping the bare subject, as well as the bare quantity instead of the trend of that quantity. Just a couple of tricks. – wismuthaft Nov 12 '15 at 21:16

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