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First of all, I am not a native English speaker and I'm completely new here, so please forgive me if I have posted the question in a wrong category or anything.

I am trying to write my Statement of Purpose for my Grad School and I want help completing this sentence.

"Being born into an era of technological revolution and electronic ___________ I was extremely fascinated by the electronic appliances right from my childhood."

So what should I fill in that blank? Something along the lines of revolution or industry. And should there be a "the" before electronic appliances or not?

  • When in doubt, avoid: "Being born into an era of technological and electronic revolution, I was fascinated by appliances right from my childhood". Also with small fixes. Also, I think you meant a synonym of 'revolution'. – Mitch Aug 21 '15 at 13:20
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We are not supposed to proof-read, however I can make a suggestion.

Being born into an era of technological revolution and electronics, I was extremely fascinated by electronic appliances right from my childhood.

I don't say that it is perfect but it is a possibility.

  • Well I did not want it to be proof-read or something, I just wanted some vocabulary help and stuff. Thanks. – ThisSiteSucks Aug 21 '15 at 10:54
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This is just a suggestion as to what I would put, so others may disagree, but advancement, in my opinion, fits quite well.

"Being born into an era of technological revolution and electronic advancement, I was extremely fascinated by the electronic appliances right from my childhood."

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    What about exponentiation instead of advancement? I mean technology and electronics have grown exponentially so it makes sense right? – ThisSiteSucks Aug 21 '15 at 14:16
  • Actually, yes, that makes a lot of sense. I mean technically since the first electronic device was made, every era is electronically advancing. To highlight the fact that this advancement is quicker or more intense than other eras, exponentiation is a great choice. – Ajaypayne Aug 21 '15 at 18:19
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This formulation?

"Being born into an era of technological revolution and continued growth of electronic, ..."

The article "the" is not incorrect, but I would remove it, if you don't refer to specific appliances you mentionned before.

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