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I was writing this in my paper.

70 million photos and videos are sent daily on Instagram, while Louvre Museum has 300,000 objects [Kaplan and Haenlein, 2010], which is merely 0.4% of Instagram in quantity.

But the sentence seems long and the structure is weird. I think I should combine Louvre's object and percentage in one sentence, but I'm not sure how to rephrase it.

Could you please help me rephrase it? Any ideas/suggestions would be appreciated. Thanks a lot.

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  • Thanks for your reminding. One quick question, does the sentence structure seen okay to you? – Mystery Aug 7 '15 at 12:59
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The Louvre Museum merely has 300,000 objects [Kaplan and Haenlein, 2010] all told, 0.4% of the 70 million photos and videos sent on Instagram daily.

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