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I'm wondering the best way to punctuate and/or format this sentence, especially the part concerning subjunctive case, in which two examples are put in quotes:

In this book, I kept finding irregular verb tense problems (especially lie/lay, sit/set and run), lack of subjunctive case (i.e., "He wished he was," instead of [the correct form] "He wished he were.") and repeated typos (e.g., "were" instead of "where," and vice versa).

(Note: This is for an online review and italics is not available.)

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    The subjunctive is not a case. Besides, "He wished he was" is fine.
    – user28567
    Aug 4, 2015 at 3:59
  • Thank you, thank you. Knew it was mood. Would have hated to make that mistake since I'm offering corrections. Lack of subjunctive is a pet peeve of mine. Writers should be held to a higher standard, IMHO.
    – gatehead
    Aug 4, 2015 at 23:24

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If this is for an online review, perhaps you should consider making the paragraph into a list:

In this book I found a variety of grammatical and textual errors such as the following:

  • irregular verb tense problems - especially lie/lay, sit/set and run
  • lack of subjunctive mood - e.g. "He wished he was" instead of "He wished he were"
  • repeated typos - e.g. "were" instead of "where" and vice versa.

I use a format like this on sites like Amazon quite regularly.

The added benefit is that, particularly with the quoted text, you don't need to worry about punctuating the quotes as lists don't require full sentences or proper punctuation.

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  • Good idea, but don't use a colon in the middle of a grammatical unit -- in each case, the bullet points could be completing the sentence started in the opening. Use a colon if you set it up like
    – ewormuth
    Aug 4, 2015 at 3:45
  • @ewormuth I think the easier option would be to simply remove "including", though it does imply that the list is not exhaustive.
    – Catija
    Aug 4, 2015 at 3:50
  • Sorry, I hit "send" before I finished the other comment, but yes, you're right, if you take out "including," it's fine.
    – ewormuth
    Aug 4, 2015 at 4:05

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