I am creating a Text Based Game. When a character arrives in a Town, they are supposed to describe the town that they are in based on the buildings that are in the town. At the moment I have a very generic and bland description that looks something like this:

I just arrived in Ashville. I can see a Motel, a Bar and a Gun Store. I should look 
around for some supplies

At the moment I am just listing what they see in the town, but the description is lacking substance. I want the player to be able to create an Image in their head of what the town looks like. I have done some research, but most of the stuff I could find was much too detailed. Is there a way to describe a list of things whilst describing each of them with some detail?

Thank you

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Use an adverbial phrase to describe your surroundings.

I just arrived in Asheville. From left to right, I can see a motel, a bar, and a gun store. ...

I just arrived in Asheville. Nearest me I see a motel, a bar, and then a gun store ...

Prepositions and adjectives are the only way to go, really.

[...] arrived in Asheville. The blue building to the left of me is a motel that faces an orange gun store situated next to a bar.

  • I will add that in. But it doesn't add enough depth. Those phrases don't really describe the individual locations themselves. Is there a way to not use a list separated by commas? – TastyLemons Jul 16 '15 at 4:12
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    You specifically asked for something that wasn't much too detailed though...at least I thought? Something concise – dockeryZ Jul 16 '15 at 4:14
  • I want a little bit of detail for each of them just not a paragraph is what I meant. – TastyLemons Jul 16 '15 at 4:15
  • I suppose you could add anything from colors to smells to sounds to sensations really. You could also group them into classes. – dockeryZ Jul 16 '15 at 4:19
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    The building on the far left is blue. The gun store is next to the red building. The bar is not next to the yellow building. The motel is not next the store that sells guns.... ;-) – Jim Jul 16 '15 at 5:08

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