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In the following sentence:

Suddenly, the ring of the phone sounded.

I believe that it is grammatically correct. But, "sounded" doesn't sound too good.

Suddenly, the ring of the phone rang.

doesn't sound that great either.

Suddenly, the ring of the phone echoed.

It somewhat fine, but the ring is not particularly "echoing", just "sounding".

Would there be any more sentences that would flow better yet keeping the same meaning, ie. I know I can do something like:

Suddenly, the phone went off.

But I want to, generally, keep the original format without changing much.

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    Suddenly, the phone rang – Barmar Apr 9 '15 at 19:54
  • If you want something that sounds more flowery, Suddenly, the ring of the phone was heard. – Barmar Apr 9 '15 at 19:55
  • That is fine, but I want to "describe" the ring instead of just saying "the phone rang". – john2546 Apr 9 '15 at 19:59
  • This isn't really a grammar question. All the examples are grammatical, you seem to be looking for something that evokes a particular style. – Barmar Apr 9 '15 at 20:01
  • I'm voting to close this question as off-topic because it's entirely opinion-based. – Kristina Lopez Apr 9 '15 at 20:40
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Some suggestions:

Suddenly, the sound of the phone echoed throughout the room.

Suddenly, the ring of the phone was heard.

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