Are these sentences correct in terms of punctuation and grammar?
She asked, "Could I have a drink of your water?" Then she walked away when I said, "No, you can't."
Thanks so much for the first three responses, but I guess I should have continued by telling you that this is part of a transcription, so I can't change the order of the words. Given that information, is 'Then' best capitalized and starting its own sentence, or would you leave it lowercase as a continuation of the prior sentence?