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I am writing a formal essay, based on the following prompt

Differing points of view make life interesting.

I am finding it hard to avoid using "our" and "we" in the essay. For example, in the following context:

Humans have a wide range of interests and hobbies; we read different books, play different sports, engage in different conversations, and ultimately posses different convictions.

and

Diversity is the catalyst for invention and innovation; it is absolutely necessary, and a vital part of the world we live in.

How can I avoid this in my essay? Or, is it fine to leave it that way?

Is it incorrect to use "we" and/or "our" in a formal essay?

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    Yes, "we" is fine here. (Unless perhaps you personally are not a human; then you can say "they".) – GEdgar Feb 16 '15 at 14:16
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It depends on how formal you wish to take the essay

Humans have a wide range of interests and hobbies; we read different books, play different sports, engage in different conversations, and ultimately posses different convictions.

could become

Humans have a wide range of interests and hobbies, such as reading different books, participation in sports, engagement in different conversations, and ultimately posses different convictions.

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  • '... reading taste in books, ...' Is making me wonder what reading tastes like and where can I experience this in books! – David Barker Feb 19 '15 at 7:42
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You can include yourself or stand to the side.

Humans have a wide range of interests and hobbies; we read different books, play different sports, engage in different conversations, and ultimately posses different convictions.

and

Humans have a wide range of interests and hobbies; they read different books, play different sports, engage in different conversations, and ultimately posses different convictions.

Similarly

Diversity is the catalyst for invention and innovation; it is absolutely necessary, and a vital part of the world we live in.

and

Diversity is the catalyst for invention and innovation; it is absolutely necessary, and a vital part of the world humans [or they, if there is a prior reference] live in.

Correctness is dependent on the attitude of your audience.

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